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Title: It's Growing Day by Day
Author: [livejournal.com profile] telesilla
Recipient: [livejournal.com profile] auburnnothenna
Pairing: McKay/Sheppard, mention of: Teyla/Kanaan, Ronon/various
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: ~27,500
Summary: During a routine mission to check out an off-world Ancient lab, team Shep is cut off from Atlantis when the stargate is buried beneath a ton of rubble. There's another way off the planet, but getting there will not be easy.

Notes: First of all, I want to thank my awesome beta, who went over this in record time. Without her help, this story would have been so very messy. Auburn asked for many things, but the one that stood out and made me write this story was: " either Sheppard and McKay, or the whole team, or even a larger Atlantis contingent, is marooned on another planet Swiss Family Robinson-style." This isn't quite that, but it's close. :)

It's Growing Day by Day

Please note, due the length of this story, it is hosted offsite.

Date: 2008-12-24 08:56 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rissabby.livejournal.com
This is one of the most enjoyable, substantial stories I've read all year. You did a wonderful job conveying the team inter-connectedness, how their strengths and weakness' mix together to balance into a strong team. And, how when one member is stressed, the others can extend themselves to re-balance it again.

I loved the idea, and your depiction, of daily story-telling. I can't imagine anything that would strengthen their team-bond-friendship more than a long quest with personal and cultural tales along the way. This is the kind of experience that becomes one of those significant, life-changing, 'blocks of memory' that seem as if they should be much longer, chronologically, than the months that it took. (I hope that makes sense.)

I liked how you had Rodney and John's relationship start out as something 'outside' the team, and then continued on to have it nestle into the team dynamic without becoming a focus or a problem.

I also liked that you created a situation that was dramatic without predators, or an enemy to flee, or tricky ancient devices. It was nice to identify with the characters, seeing them do something that I could imagine myself doing.

I adored Ronon for telling Rodney that he thought Rodney had grown enough that he could have survived years as a runner. That's got to be one of the most affirming, confidence-building things he could ever say to him. *kiss* xxxxx's to Ronon.

I don't know if you want to explore this story further, but there are some scenes I'd be interested in reading. A couple would be; what was it like for John when he was taming the ponies and, how was Teyla's reunion?

Well, I still have gifts to wrap. Thank you for a lovely break in this busy day.

Date: 2009-01-09 02:06 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] telesilla.livejournal.com
*blushes* Oh wow, I feel so bad for not getting back to you sooner after you gave me such lovely feedback. Thank you so much. :)

And yes, I wanted to create a situation that was tough but called for the team to bond over the long haul without a huge amount of whumping and so I decided that a trek would be better than something more immediate like a Wraith attack or a messed up Ancient device.

I do intend to write both a sequel and possibly some outtakes, although I'm not sure about the latter.

Thank you again for the wonderful feedback. I'm so glad you liked it.

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