I love kid-Rodney – he’s cute and yet still very much Rodney!
For a second, John looked at him and saw the best friend he could never resist winding up. "But why?" John asked, his voice sickly sweet. "Meredith is such a pretty name."
Rodney's scowl was murderous. - ROTFL!!
I loved how you wrote the story, going back and forth in a way that worked perfectly. The first scene, with Rodney climbing the gate, made me laugh! I can so see that happening (and sooo wish I could draw it, but I’m not that talented!).
I loved John’s angst and the way he overcompensates after the skateboard accident, and how he finally gets it at the end. The story totally tugged at my heartstrings, not just with John’s fear of losing Rodney, but kid-Rodney’s growing unhappiness and the conversation about his nightmare - I’m glad John hugged him, ‘cos I sooo wanted to! Some nice touches of humour here and there too – like this bit:
"John," Teyla said, and waited until he pulled his eyes away from Ronon, until she had his full attention. "We are concerned."
The words were so ominous that John immediately noted all the clear exits and began planning a strategic retreat. - LOL! Uh oh, John, run for the hills!! *bg*
Thank you! This is going into my reread pile, to be read and treasured over and over again!!
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Date: 2009-12-22 04:56 pm (UTC)For a second, John looked at him and saw the best friend he could never resist winding up. "But why?" John asked, his voice sickly sweet. "Meredith is such a pretty name."
Rodney's scowl was murderous. - ROTFL!!
I loved how you wrote the story, going back and forth in a way that worked perfectly. The first scene, with Rodney climbing the gate, made me laugh! I can so see that happening (and sooo wish I could draw it, but I’m not that talented!).
I loved John’s angst and the way he overcompensates after the skateboard accident, and how he finally gets it at the end. The story totally tugged at my heartstrings, not just with John’s fear of losing Rodney, but kid-Rodney’s growing unhappiness and the conversation about his nightmare - I’m glad John hugged him, ‘cos I sooo wanted to! Some nice touches of humour here and there too – like this bit:
"John," Teyla said, and waited until he pulled his eyes away from Ronon, until she had his full attention. "We are concerned."
The words were so ominous that John immediately noted all the clear exits and began planning a strategic retreat. - LOL! Uh oh, John, run for the hills!! *bg*
Thank you! This is going into my reread pile, to be read and treasured over and over again!!