I hope you don't mind my mentioning that the story has some distracting shifts between past and present tense toward the beginning. (In the first scene, Mitch "asks" but John "said", for example.)
Normally that would throw me out of a story, but this has an intriguing start and such a true-to-canon Rodney that I kept with it, and I'm really glad I did. This John is also very well characterized and it was nice to see Lorne in the mix.
It's a great AU, it feels fleshed out but not overstuffed, and the immediate connection between John and Rodney is a pleasure to watch. :-)
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Date: 2008-12-28 08:48 am (UTC)Normally that would throw me out of a story, but this has an intriguing start and such a true-to-canon Rodney that I kept with it, and I'm really glad I did. This John is also very well characterized and it was nice to see Lorne in the mix.
It's a great AU, it feels fleshed out but not overstuffed, and the immediate connection between John and Rodney is a pleasure to watch. :-)