Thanks for that. But if you had seen the wish list that I had to deal with I am lucky that it ended up like that. I am wondering if it would have been better if it had been in two seperate parts. But then again, one does happen because of the other and thats why I wrote it that way.

Also, while I can understand what you mean about having a second beta, I hardly had time to get it beta'd the first time around. It also may have suffered because of the fact that it was rushed as RL got in the way majorly and I only just managed to get it done.

That having been said, I have to say thank you for your comment. I felt that the critiscm was constructive and helpful and thanks for reading.